A lovely advert Tamzin. I really like your PicCollage photos, capturing all of the smiles that can be seen at your theme park. Ending your advert with a huge smile was a great idea, as that's what I will remember most from your advert - a happy place to be. I like the way that you mixed up examples of the rides with how visitors will feel at your park.
Could you have asked a question in you advert I wonder?
"What are you doing this summer?"
"Do you really want to miss out on all this fun?" for example.
Great job!
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Welcome to Year 5's blog at Tanfield Lea Community Primary School, a primary school in County Durham who want to broaden our horizons and to show the world what we have to offer.
Our September topic will be 'The Normans', looking at the history of the Norman periods and what we can learn about that time period using primary and secondary sources.
Our literacy will be based on the book 'Goodnight Mr Tom' by Michelle Magorian which takes place during the Second World War.