
While marking your books I discovered this golden sentence from Arundeep, which is just a tiny fragment of his excellent piece if writing.
Which adverb and which connective do you think I was pleased to see?
Could you up-level Arundeep's sentence by improving the choice of connective! Or perhaps use technical language to describe the bridge?
Great work Arundeep!
"Go across the bridge slowly and swing across the rope. Once you've got to other side, be careful with the swamp. The monkey might take the map off you so be careful."