Can you use openers, punctuation and connectives to create a sentence as excellent as the one Anais used in science this week? Remember capital letters and full stops are still needed online.
"In addition to this, your plant will need sunlight to make the food therefore sunlight is very important." Anais Little.
Rachel s
9/16/2013 04:44:10 am
I love that sentence it really reminds me about how to help a plant grow and I LOVE the word therefore
Mr Temple
9/16/2013 06:28:30 am
Super use of In addition with the comma in the right place!
Rachel s
9/16/2013 05:05:11 pm
Mr Patterson I would like to try an up leveled sentence:
An important thing, you must make sure your plant doesnt get any direct sunlight, therefore your plant wont get to hot and become unable to make food.
HANNNAH
9/16/2013 09:46:44 pm
GOOD LUCK RACHEL
M Patterson
9/16/2013 05:17:02 pm
Well done Rachel! Pleased to see you're starting the day by getting your brain warmed up for the days activities. It always good to see up levelled sentences in subjects other than literacy.
Have a great day :-)
hannah
9/16/2013 09:38:48 pm
super sentence anais what a sentence!!
anais
9/16/2013 09:39:13 pm
Mr patterson you have really embarrest me
Lauren
9/16/2013 09:39:35 pm
Anais Great sentance blew my mind WOW!
HANNAH
9/16/2013 09:46:18 pm
I LOVE YOUR SENTENCE I WISH I COULD BEAT THAT
Mr Patterson
9/16/2013 10:35:30 pm
It's great to see positive feedback! It would be even better if you could explain what you liked about Anais sentence. What do you think she has done well?
Even better, would be to have a go of your own. I'm sure if your had a look through your own books, you will find plenty of examples from your own work!
Tamzin
9/17/2013 02:32:50 am
Great sentence Anais I WISH I could think of a sentence that FANTASTIC!!
alicia
9/17/2013 09:47:12 pm
GREAT sentece anais WISH I COULD DO ONE AS GOOD AS YOURS
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